My Run Away - By Joanna
When I was six years old my friend and I were playing in the back yard when we heard guns. My friends mum said come inside. We ran inside the house my friends mum tried to call my mum. She didn't answer the phone so my friend had to share her clothes with me.
When it was night time I had to run away with my friends mum and dad we went at night so then the baddies won't get us.
I was so scared my friend's mum said don't be scared we will find your family. We were hiding in the bushes.
It took five days to get to the boat, but we got there. We hopped in the boat. There were so many people in the boat I thought the boat would sink but it didn't. Then we heard a noise, it was pirates people were screaming the pirates were shooting guns at us there were so many people that got hurt from the guns.
The next day we arrived at the refugee camp I was so relieved that we were at the refugee camp. Then I saw my family walking by their tent. I was so happy to see them.
I spent eleven days as a refugee. We finally got to New Zealand. It was amazing.
great job this is the great story i like the 4th paragraph
ReplyDeleteHi Joanna, your story is amazing I really like your 5th paragraph
ReplyDeleteHi its Fergus i reckon it's a great story.I have been learning about refugees.Could you add a bit of punctuation.
ReplyDeleteI likd the prt wen yue fand ur fand yr famale
ReplyDeleteHello Joanna, I really like your 5th paraghraph, its amazing.
ReplyDeleteHi Joanna I think that your title is really good and I like the your intro
ReplyDeleteHi I Joanna I love when you found your family in the story
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